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I agree with Reichieru. Grammar needs some work and you don't have enough details in the chapter. Can't wait to read more.

I loved it! It was much better than anything I could have done. Me and poems just don't mix. Anywayz I enjoyed reading it and can't wait to read more ...

It was funny and I enjoyed reading it. I can't wait to read more of your stuff. The ending was surprising and made me laugh. At first I thought maybe ...

I liked it! I look forward to reading more of your work. Good job and keep up the good work!

Yes there are quite a few punctuation errors. I enjoyed reading it. Good job! Keep up the good work!

I've been wanting to read Sisterhood of the Traveling Pants but I can't find it anywhere.

I was wondering the same thing as Reichieru. I liked the way you started it, but I think you need to slow down and describe stuff as well just like ...

I loved it too. Too bad there isn't more to read. It would be so cool if you did add more. Tell me if you do. Anywayz, good job and ...

I remember when you posted it on RK and really enjoyed it then and still do. The only mistake that I found was the same one that DarkSarah found. Good ...

Seriously? I like the poem, but I'm not going to crit b/c me and poetry just don't mix.

Good job....sorry i don't have time to crit much so all I can say for now is keep up the good work and I can't wait to read more!!!

Good job...sorry I don't have time to crit the mistakes....bell's about to ring. Keep up the good work Jade!!!

It did go a little fast. I can't wait to read more. I'm curious as to what is going to happen next. Good job and keep up the good work!!!

I liked it...good start. I agree with Mattie and Reichieru. Keep up the good work!

Thanx a bunch. Yeah I sometimes do think that I told parts a little too fast, but I had too cuz it was a short story and couldn't be any ...